kongoro71
Hope you are doing well your books are something special. Wonderful made.
LeoMarBel
Macabre_Libra
I have called the new fanfic of the former "Fates and Roses", the actual title is still in the works since doesn't sound all too well for my liking. I hope you're safe from Covid and anything else that may cause harm. Have a great day!
Macabre_Libra
@LeoMarBel oh that is alright, there is always some chances here and there, it's good that you're doing well in this time of the pandemic! Our test this semester is also next week so... we're kind of in the same page lol
LeoMarBel
@Macabre_Libra noted, unfortunately school is startinf next week and I'd be busy again. I apologise if I'm not able to read your story!
Macabre_Libra
Hello @LeoMarBel! It's been a while since we've conversed. I've been setting new stones for myself in my path along my stories, and I've also gotten to a sense of humoring the old "Fate's Executors" thing since it didn't quite work. Instead of completely abandoning the story, I've decided to rewrite it, just not as the same as the old concept of the former one. There difference between the two and I have come to a decision on changing some major details of the fanfic (I'll still take on your last advices though).
Macabre_Libra
Emotions and thoughts are the only thing that I have a problem of, I have already written the 4 and 5 parts in my notes.
LeoMarBel
@Macabre_Libra oop sorry that was a long time ago... I'm here to inform you about your latest question. I may be uploading a new chapter to address your question soon. Hope you like it!
Macabre_Libra
@LeoMarBel I did just published chapter 3, you can check it out if you want. I went with medical reasons here because I certainly did not have an idea to actually put in— you can read it and tell me what you think, you can suggest a better version of it when you see one lol. I'd gladly take your offer, thanks
Macabre_Libra
Ummm... excuse me uhhh...can I ask you a question? For a making a scene, I mean.
I've been recently doing a Fumikage Tokoyami fanfic that surrounds death, I don't know know how to make a scene where Tokoyami denies that he is dead while in the presence of the Grim Reaper. His denial of him being deceased and is trying to desperately convince himself that he is asleep or in a coma and all that is happening around him is just a nightmarish dream— Tokoyami does not know how to respond and other such.
I don't know how to write this scenario down, so, if you can, can you suggest something that I should do?
Macabre_Libra
@LeoMarBel ah... That's a good suggestion, but unfortunately I have already used that method on chapter 2 since I am actually skipping those parts. I may use bits and bits to put some in the book for maybe a short scene where Death shows he and DS the way that they had died.
LeoMarBel
Oh, I didn't realise this was regarding that book. Sorry...
Wow, Tokoyami's death is sure dark, but now I understand your situation. Tokoyami didn't have a reason to believe he's still alive, but you need him to still believe he was alive... Hmmm
When would be Tokoyami's last recollection of his living?
(Suggestion)
It might work if Tokoyami last remember being with Bakugo, seeing all might break in and he was relieved but passed out due to exhaustion (especially due to his berserk)
Bakugo and Tokoyami was transported but they are separated, Tokoyami teleported to the experiment ward while Bakugo was saved in the original all might vs afo place. This would lead to Tokoyami believing that he was already saved by all might, therefore not believing he was dead.
If you were to use my suggestion. Im not sure if you want to use it as a flashback. It might work better to create a prequel before your initial first chapter when Tokoyami have reached the spirit world. This chapter would probably start off either at the LOV bar scene right before all might enters or if you want to describe the situation further, how Tokoyami deals with the LOV.
I hope my suggestion helps you or gives you an idea of sorts!
Macabre_Libra
And although it still needs work and very short, you can go to my works and see "Fate's Executors" for a bit insight. Tokoyami is also prone to panic attacks in this because of his crippling anxiety and such.
Macabre_Libra
I still love reading 'Layers of Suffering' over and over again, it's amazing! Keep up the good work!
LeoMarBel
Another Tokoyami story is in the works! It will be a Christmas special. It will not be a long series, either a one shot or a 2 part.
"Class 1A tries to cheer up a being of darkness in an unorthodox way. "
Hint: It will revolve around a particular fan art made from me...
LeoMarBel
I changed the chapter introduction of Belenus just a little(at the end) ... I really feel that I didn't portray him as crazy as I liked... Hoped you like that little change.
I'd appreciate any comments to whether you think appropriate or not.
marVex044
Your tokoyami Fanfic IS astonishing!!!! you just got a new follower!!! keep it up man!!
aWomanNamedLullabye
Layers of suffering is really good, it's rare to see fics about minor characters that don't involve OCs (in an x reader sinario). Keep up the amazing work.