praise2005

A trash work too corny it needs to be more interesting not making too many foolish mistakes 

Letha1Bacon

@praise2005  Then why not say that instead of blanketly attacking my work? 
            Also, too fixed on the main heroine? It's a love at first sight scenario that, along with his lack of experience in interpersonal relationships, causes him to make a massive mistake that introduces the main conflict of the  plot. She starts off hating him because she thinks he's the evil master she'd been taught to expect would own her some day, but grows to like  him because he treats her like a person instead of the slave she is. They also survive life several and death situations together, some times with him risking his life for her on top of helping her reach her own goals of getting stronger thanks to his abilities affecting her. 
            They started off on a bad leg, but he EARNs her faith, loyalty and love.
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praise2005

@praise2005 how it's too fixed on the main character being too attached to the heroine  it's too predictable, too direct there should atleast be some mystery not just blind faith and loyalty 
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Letha1Bacon

@praise2005  And what mistakes are you talking about?
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