Hi honey. I read your book.
Okay so let me just be honest with you.
It's good. But you're taking it too fast. I mean, I don't even know how you met the first guy, then he asked you out and since he was so popular there's no way a guy that popular would ask a girl out at first sight.
I mean it's good, if you took your time and actually made your chapters longer then I would enjoy it so much ! I see no problem wth your vocabulary but I've been meaning to ask how old you really are.
You need to start making paragraphs, speech marks, adding pictures, cast members, parts of versions ( more commonly referred to in watt pad slang language as : POV )
Like hey, you've got the potential, you're just under estimating it.
Make your chapters a tad bit longer darling, and if you want to still improve your vocabulary to make it feel like you're reading aj actual book and not something that looks like a diary entry, I suggest you read The Harry Potter series. It helped me a lot.
I didn't want to be dis honest and say I loved it and you're great, though both of these things are true, there's a right time for everything.
Message me about how you want your book to look like and give me an over view of your characters, also make a cover for your book with the title on the book, it will help attract people to read, trust me.
All in all, you have so much potential. I feel you could do much, much better.
I'm not the kind to lie and say nice things to get votes for my book. You can always message me or ask me to help you out with writing, feel free.
Thanks again for giving me the option to read your book.
Please don't consider anything I've written in a rude or offensive way, you asked for my opinion and this is productive writing feedback and my opinion mixed in.
Cheers
