rose2q4e

          Gentle Reader,
          How about giving a moment of yours to read my first ever story.
          I truly appreciate the feedback and suggestions of yours.
          Thank you.
          
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/377116417?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=rose2q4e

psyco_berry12

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AuthorYabukim

Hey sis! I saw you offered to let me read your story, and I gotta admit, I haven't dove in deep yet. But I've definitely taken a peek!  Now, I'm not a super experienced author myself, but as a reader, I'd suggest adding some structure to your writing.  Don't worry, it's just a thought, no pressure! But I really think using paragraphs will make your story engaging and feel more attractive and stable for readers.  When you use dialogue all the time, it can feel a bit shaky and less engaging.  So, my advice?  Go for those paragraphs! I know some people love stories with lots of dialogue, but I personally find that paragraphs make it easier to get lost in the story.  It's just a thought, though!  If you want any advice or something I'm here anytime.
            Thanks for sharing, and good luck with all your future writing adventures! You've got this! 
             
          
          
          

Lily_kim-0

@yabu_kim actually I'm sorry that I'm giving late reply. I was quite busy. But thank you for your time you have gave me and thank you so much for your advice and I'm really grateful for that and I think I'm going to apply the things that you have said me and I'm really grateful and thank you so much
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dreemforyou

I really  like ur story
          

Lily_kim-0

@dreemforyou thanks for understanding 
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Lily_kim-0

@dreemforyou  sorry I'm not tannie stand so I can't make it
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