In fairness, ang unique ng naisip mong reincarnation story. You broke the cliche. But I suggest na i-improve mo pa ang mga grammars, punctuations, and dialogues mo para mas maging bongga ang execution natin. Shala~
New writer ka pa naman kaya marami pang room for improvement. Keep writing, lovelove ( ꈍᴗꈍ)