Okeydokey, guys i need your help. Imma give you guys a taste of a new story i was thinking of uploading. Gimme feedback!!
A Lily Among Thorns.
“Ahhowowow!”
My opponent screamed as the lance struck his chest. Sir Laden was knocked off his horse. As both of his peasant squires, of which their names I do not know, ran to council him, Sir Laden spat blood at my feet. I took off my helm, ran a hand through my sweaty hair, and smirked, trying to hold back my laughter. Even when cheating my brother could never beat me. A slow traitor-of-a-chuckle escaped my lips. Still chuckling, I turned my sterling grey war horse, Hero, around. We trotted back to the stables. On are way there, Hero snorted.
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