unknownwriter123979

Hi, I am sorry for posting this without asking, but I really want and need advice for my short story book which is about a 18 minute read, it does contain many many themes of death, murder and strong mental themes, please read responsibly. I would like any feedback or advice to make it better thank you 
          
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