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@chaedasoo My discord is Aresokou but I turned on a setting that does not allow for friend requests to be sent to me so idk how to turn it off lol

@Ls_Icecream70o07 do you have dc? i have until vol 4 but will try to search until 12 ^^

@chaedasoo So I have read the rest of the manga, but saw the Light Novel had more of the story to it.  Have you seen the continuation of the Manga to the Light Novel of y2 19?  I have been having a hard time finding links to the Light Novel's that I can download.  So if you know any good links for reading any of them, please let me know, Thank you!

@ Ls_Icecream70o07  love it! 

@MuqsithSafa Lmk if you like it so far :)

@ Ls_Icecream70o07  alr, thanks

@RepulsiveKiyo Well I mean I don’t thing female/male  reader stories have a specific way of going in my opinion. I’m calling it a slow burn because of the build up i’m trying to have in it, like I feel already now that it’s going pretty slow compared to other fanfics I’ve read. In other fanfics it’s like they all immediately get with the person they want within 8 or 10 chapters without much buildup which is why i’m trying to be “different” in this case. 
            
            In the case of my character revealing her motivations “too early” they were intended to be revealed early in the story as for a reader to get to “know” the character because I feel in a lot of “x reader” stories it’s more about the other characters rather than y/n themself and that I never seem to know much about y/n which is why i mentioned in an authors note “to remember that you are the main character.”
            
            I understand what you mean by the characters talking big most of the time but what they do doesn’t justify what they said.  That’s mainly because I have not really finished the story yet because I’m still working on how it’s going to correlate with the next chapters although yes part of it does have to do with the fact that I’ve never really written a fanfic before
            Thank you for your critique.

@Ls_Icecream70o07 well I can be a little harsh. Tell me if you want to go that way.
            
            Till then I'll give you the general review. So, the premise is a little common but a little unique too, first of all the story starts with the pov of y/n and not from Kiyo's, which in itself is different for female reader type of stories maybe, I don't read the female readers, male readers or oc type of stories so you'll have to forgive me for not knowing how these stories go, but yeah it was unique for me. 
            
            And also, this isn't a slowburn romance that you implied in your first a/n.... It feels rushed, especially knowing what kind of man Kiyo is. Ayanokoji wouldn't let anyone see past his facade that early. I can elaborate on it later.
            
            Then your character reveals her motivations too early. I can go in detail but as I said, it'll be harsh. Also, the characters talk big most of the times, but what they do doesn't justify what they said, be it Kiyo or y/n, though it may be likely due to some lack of experience on your part, you haven't been in writing for long afterall.
            
            I've more things to say and can even give review based on specific chapters, just need your confirmation.

@RepulsiveKiyo follow up?