Updates I made in the rewrite so far:
PERSONALITY FIXES:
Geo more bubbly and closer to bread In the first few chapters, showing their friendship.
Yet more calm and responsible, sort of holding the group together.
Aria more rude and impatient.
Bread quite tired and not really caring.
Showed Serena and Kayleigh’s friendship a bit more.
Gave Godz, Train, Maruu and Ash a few more lines in the early chapters.
Overall made people’s lines fit them better.
NEW WRITING STYLE:
I made it so that it looked less like dialogue.
EXTRAS:
Almost everyone was better introduced in chapter 2, except Maruu and Ash who were in chapter 3
Chapter 3 is now slightly longer.
I now have to rewrite chapters 4, 5, 6 and 7 which won’t take longer then around 3 days. After that, chapter 8 will be at and I have quite a good storyline for the rest of the book!
I can’t wait to continue, and thank you for all the support in these last 2 months.
Hope you enjoy reading, and merry Christmas!