momp100
First of all, I love your story. The writing is really well done. I’ll keep reading anything you write.
But I do have one issue. I feel like Toka is being a hypocrite sometimes. She calls people out for things that she does too. And she likes to demand respect for it.
Sometimes you have to be a little rough to make people understand, but she doesn’t know when to chill. She’s too full of herself and acts like she’s the only righteous one. I don’t think it’s supposed to be like that.
Then she says she’s doing it for the good of the people and that she’s a hero, but she still chooses to save the minority instead of saving the people she really needs to save.
I just think she’s self-righteous and being a big hypocrite.
And yes, people always choose to save the many over the one. I understand that. I’m not saying I don't
But she doesn’t understand that people can change and people can grow. She sticks to her one point of view and acts like she doesn’t care when she actually does.
Don’t get it twisted. I like her personality. I like the all-powerful female character. I love it.
I would just like to see a little more compassion. But it’s still good. It’s still good. Of course I’m still reading it. It’s really good, so keep up your wonderful writing.
This is just my take on it from reading it. This isn’t anything against you. This is just my point of view on the character.
Luminawriting
@momp100 Honestly, I try to write flawed characters; if they are perfect, they are boring. The latest chapter I posted shows off her slow-changing perception.
Luminawriting
@momp100 That's part of her character flaw, honestly. She's not meant to be perfect. If anything, she's an adult stuck in a child's body with a brain still developing. She has the mindset of "the strongest" and holds the bitterness the title brings. She's also a former Warlord who still expects respect without giving it back. She's extremely traumatized and refuses to talk about it. She's just flawed with a selfish part to her, a part she's desperately refused to give to anyone. As you read on, you'll see the shift in her personality; it's like Bakugou, two very strong-willed forces crashing to see who breaks first. She's an earthbender, being rigid, blunt, and stuborn is part of what they are.
