MJaniceice
Of course and maybe some back story not that you did it but no one likes it when storys just jump to the umm good parts or the fast moving ones I dont know but other than that maybe some more conflict. Your doing grate tho and remmember its your story people like me just read them dont change it to much to where we are tellling you how the story should go thats your choice and if they dont like it go some where else