MMU_Writer

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AprilJester

Autumn Diaries Mini Awards has started judging! I am the judge for Best Plot and Best Plot Twist. Since I do not have time to completely read 20 stories, I am asking all participants to create a storyline/plotline, consisting of a few paragraphs, that give me the contents of your story–from beginning to end. I am not judging writing style or SPAG, just plot or plot twist, whichever you entered.
          
          You will send this to me privately so you are not spoiling the story for your readers! There are several ways to communicate with me in my bio. If none are acceptable, please share it using a Google Doc with permissions granted. I will delete it after I do the download.
          
          Example:
          
          Imagine by AprilJester
          Post Apocalyptic world where surviving humans are miniature dragons. Sci-Fi/Teen/YA
          
          Clover was born a dragonet and is still a ‘child’ at the beginning of the story. Another dragonet, Tasha, is injured while trying to save newly hatched dragonets. She is taken in by the aliens now living on earth, who the former humans are terrified of. Tasha escapes after two months and the other dragonets shun her. Clover is furious with the flock for doing this. When the healed dragonet returns to the aliens voluntarily to hunt the creature that attacked the nest, Clover decides she wants that to. The story shows Clover’s progress as she chooses an alien handler and becomes a bonded animal who hunts the monsters. The story ends happily, with the handler finding out she is sentient and the two having their first conversation.

AprilJester

@MMU_Writer -- Will do. Thank you!
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MMU_Writer

@AprilJester yes, that would be fine. I would like for you to read Battle Vows & Always Dirt from the Magnificent Myths book please.  Thank you.
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AprilJester

@MMU_Writer -- It would depend upon what I'm judging. If you just want a specific story read, let me know the chapters. My concern is more for stories that are on-going, where I don't have the whole plot, completed stories that are a two plus hour read, and plot twists that I can not see because the story is ongoing or a big read. 
            
            It's up to you. If you just want a specific chapter or two read, I will absolutely do that.
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JustAWannabeWriter30

Hi! Thank you again for sharing your book in the Astania Harvest Festival Awards! It was a pleasure to read your work. I'm pasting your score sheet and notes of critique that I made for most sections. If you are unhappy with these scores, you are welcome to delete this message from your board. I hope this serves as encouragement to you as an author and that it helps you in your writing journey.
          
          Magnificent Myths
          	Title 5/5
          	Blurb 4/5 would have liked to know more about what to expect after the first chapter.
          	Cover 7/10
          	Writing style 5/10
          	Plot 14/20 - would have liked more connections between chapters. They aren’t necessarily stand-alone stories if the first chapter is required reading to understand what’s happening and why, with rolling information between them.
          	Grammar 5/15 - frequently switches from past to present tense
          	Dialogue 13/15
          	Characters 22/30 - Lots of unique characters, but not all of them had unique voices and drives. Some fell a little flat.
          	Additional notes: Magnificent Myths is an interesting collection about original myths. I personally love a good myth or origin story, so it was fun diving into these. The scenes often fell victim to white wall syndrome, which made it difficult to immerse in the scenes, but overall a fun time reading these various stories and how they connect.

MMU_Writer

Thank you.
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CansburgCommunity

Creativity, uniqueness, and originality: 12/15
          
          I must say that you’re a very talented author! I could feel the originality throughout the pages as I read on as I have never stumbled upon anything else like it. Though some elements did seem quite familiar to me, I couldn’t help but appreciate the pinch of uniqueness you bring to the stories. Keep it up!
          
          Character Speech and Development: 11/15
          
          As mentioned, everything was amazing apart from elements which I felt dragged the pacing a bit. In the ‘Engaging Curse’, there were those parts where she’s having a fight with her friend to which I felt it was quite unnecessary as it abruptly halted me from my enjoyment mode. But throughout the stories such as ‘The Beauty Empire’, both the writing style and speech development have developed to which I’m impressed.
          
          Plot and world setup: 8/10
          
          As mentioned before, the plot is immaculate and enjoyable! You should try writing out a novel sometime, as I can see talent etched throughout the pages.
          
          Personal Enjoyment: 3/5
          
          Not a fan of short stories, but this one might be an exception. Good job author!

MMU_Writer

@CansburgCommunity thank you so much!
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CansburgCommunity

Title: 2/5
          
          When I first stumbled upon the title, it sounded like some astrological magazine lmao. There was some intriguing hook yet there wasn’t any. The blurb would cover most parts as I understand it's a collection of short stories and I’m intrigued to read the story about the cursed bride. I would suggest wording the blurb a bit more professionally to make up the title.
          
          Cover: 1/5
          
          To be honest, the cover isn’t quite attractive to plunge in readers. Something about the graphic is off and the font styles don't go together either. I do understand not all of us are graphic experts and with that in mind, I’d suggest you to check out different graphic shops in Wattpad which could help solve this issue!
          
          Spelling, grammar, and vocabulary: 3/5
          
          I would say that I’m quite impressed with the spelling and vocabulary used. Though, I would suggest running the draft through a grammar checker to rectify punctuation errors which might affect the flow of reading.
          
          Language technique and writing style: 13/15
          
          I loved the writing! Despite the book being a collection of short stories, the writing style did justice to the entire book. It was natural, simple, yet crafty enough to keep readers hooked throughout each story. My personal favorite writing would obviously be the ‘Engaging Curse’ as I felt the writing to be very lucid which did justice to the overall pacing and plot.
          
          Pacing: 13/15
          
          Since the writing style is immaculate, the pacing went hand in hand too. It wasn’t slow paced nor fast, it was just perfect. There were moments where I felt that some elements could have been avoided inorder to keep the plot intact, but apart from that it was amazing!