ForeverYoung552
Some suggestions Maybe
Try to paragraph into sections. Like you wrote it all in one para. It will make it easier to read.
And a bit less detail?! If that makes sense . It's annoying for readers like me.
But over all GREAT chapter
ForeverYoung552
@MSK__7 and give like double spaces in between paragraphs Like this "Jekdjkdk Idjdjeudi I think you get the idea Sorry if I sound very rude, I'm not very good at it
