MacEliz

@Chronus47 no prob would u mind following back?

dummydoodles

Hey there sweetheart!
          so here goes nothing
          As a critique
          The storyline is beauriful and whatever you have planned for the story I feel will be real good but I do think you could work a little more on their first date.
          You did explain the makeover part for the full of first chapter then why not the date?
          My very humble suggestion is that you could make their date for the full of second chapter (if you need ideas I am here to help) and end the chapter when he reaches the grave so that people will be intrigued to see whose grave that would be.
          Try to put in more conversation because I tell you what blind dates are honestly awkward. 
          Think about what I said... no compelling just well wishing. :) :)