Your oneshot delivers a heavy emotional punch. The tension is raw, and Will’s internal struggle is written beautifully—his fear of telling Alicia the truth makes the whole scene feel painfully real. The pacing is steady, the grief believable, and the supporting characters (Kalinda, Cary, Diane) feel true to their personalities without overshadowing the central relationship. Alicia’s awakening is especially strong: her panic, the mask moment, and her desperate questions make the reveal hit even harder. The final breakdown in Will’s arms is heartbreaking but effective. If anything, you could tighten a few sentences for flow, but overall the emotional weight and character voices land perfectly.
