The way I like to review stories is to be as harsh yet nice as possible. I will be borderline trolling you while giving actual advice, such as if a character has glass in his stomach he has little time before bleeding out in real life so he can't give this grand speech of love. Fiction is an escape from reality, yet for it to be believed and accepted it must be grounded in reality. That is my biggest belief and I like to remind people that. So yeah.....