Hey my love
Feel free to vent to me about whatever you want
Especially about friendships because I’ve been there I’m still there
In fact my bsf has sent me some texts and I don’t have the energy to reply to her and deal with her because.. well it’s a long story
But sometimes even cutting people out it’s a good thing
You wanted a review about your story
I had a look at it and voted :)
so what I think is that it’s quite rushed. One minute we are at home and the next we are at a club. I think you need to spread it out and slow it down.
So describe things more. Explain things. Tell us what the character would be thinking. Introduce characters slowly. Remember that not all the action needs to happen in the first chapter. It just needs go hook readers.
I love the plot, it’s really interesting. Keep it up
