onkiboy
Your book is interesting for your firts book. I'll say that the book is pretty chaotic from the amount you have provided. The jump from the first chapter to the second one is huge and the progression is over whelming im my opinion
onkiboy
no proplem
MammonTheOne
@onkiboy Thanks, I'm not that good with progression, but I'm currently remaking in bc I felt that it was going too fast. Currently I have ch 1-20 down and ready, just spell checking. In like, one more week I'll restart the book. Thanks for the review
