MandiLynn

Been working on some new ideas, playing around with some possibilities… stay tuned!

MandiLynn

Hey y'all, so I unpublished "The Older Man" and recently posted the prologue for "The Neighbor." It's the same characters as "The Older Man" but now in one POV and a new storyline. Give it a shot, please and let me know what you think? I've already written a few chapters for it!

JacquelineScheulRN

@MandiLynn hi,what is the title of   sequel of the older man again? just looking for it in my list..thanks
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MandiLynn

After the feedback I've received, "The Older Man" is being revised so it has been unpublished, along with the sequel. Thank you for understanding and I hope you enjoy the newest form of this story once it is re-published!

NicoleMcKenzie0

Hi mandi. I’ve been reading your story the older man, and I have to say, what were you doing? The story is completely disorganized. You have multiple different plots going, and it’s hard to follow along because none of them are explained in any way! The story does have potential. I can tell that you are a good writer, it’s just you lack focus in your writing. You’re trying to make this a story that keeps you on your toes, but for you to start trying to get people on their toes, you need to give the a floor. Just some constructive criticism. 

MandiLynn

@NicoleMcKenzie0 appreciate the feedback. I haven't been on as much since I'm writing my stories separately and then possibly posting them here. I actually came on to copy my stories onto another document and do a looooot of rewriting!
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CalikaLe

@NicoleMcKenzie0 
            
            I agree with you. The multiple pov give a headache because I'm trying to catch up their own story/problem.
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