@MariahLee284
Oh yeah, by the way! If you want, I can help you with the quality of the pictures you put in there! ^^ I can see some greenscreen stuff here and there, and if you let me help, I can work on the pictures for you. You don't have to of course. I completely understand if you don't want any help. It was just a suggestion.
Alright, I'm almost done with the introductions. I really like the way you write! Like, the dialouges are pretty well written, HOWEVER, I recommend you something.
When you write the dialouges, try putting spaces between each character. I'm terrible at explaining, so lemme show you what I mean:
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Character 1: Hello!
Character 2: Oh, hi!
Character 1: How are you doing? Didn't see you in a while, haha!
Character 2: I'm fine, what about you?
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Like that. Everytime a different character says something, put spaces inbetween the sentences. That way, it's way easier to read. And it looks more appropriate. I hope you know what I mean. Lemme know if this helped! ^^