@suzukitokya1234 I read your story. On the positive side, you're good at describing locations. On the negative side, the context is completely unclear; it feels like I've just started reading the second book in a series. For three chapters, it's unclear what the main character's name is, what game she's in, or how aware she is of what's happening. It's a strange situation where the heroine understands and reacts to events, while I simply couldn't grasp the essence of what's happening. So far, it's a strange story with a description of the world and action without a clear plot or characters. Despite what I've written, you probably have a chance of reaching the target audience of fans of litrpg, isekai, and similar genres (it's worth noting that I'm only superficially familiar with them). I can't give advice as I don't consider myself competent enough. Just keep writing as you like, and then, with time, you'll understand what and where you can improve.
