May_lay

Thank you, Morgan! :) I very much enjoyed what you wrote, I voted it! :D

shayebay

Hey:D Can you please critique my story, "Cold Fire"? It's fantasy and it's only 3 parts long.
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/14460437-cold-fire-prologue#.UW4GhMhaKZE
          
          Melissa has a rare, undiagnosed disease, or so say the doctors that did tests on her for half of her life. She doesn't need a medical certificate to tell her that she's different. She was born with a body temperature so low that most people would die before they even started living. Keyword: most. Somehow, Melissa has managed to live for fifteen years, always moving, always struggling to survive. But it's not the physical challenges that bother her, it's the mental. The doctors told her that in order for her organs to function under such an icy temperature, her body must take the heat from the air, slowly turning her temporary home freezing and uninhabitable. Which means, if she stays in one place for too long, she'll kill everyone around her. Melissa tries to ignore the stares, the hushed whispers that accompany her and tries to live a life as normal as possible. But she's failing miserably. And it's only getting worse.

smidorii

Hey! Would you be willing to critique my story? :) It's only got 4 chapters right now but i'd love some feedback!
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/4804571-cold-waters
          
          Mimi and her best friend, Jace, have just graduated high school and are ready for the new beginnings that will soon unfold. His brother, Zion, agrees to let them move in with him and the experience is a lot more than any of them expected it to be.