Hi, I have read your book The Understudy and I really liked the story, however I would like to forward some suggestions:
- If I were you I would skip a line for every line n a dialogue as it can be confusing as to who is speaking what.
- There are some grammar mistakes when referring to the main character: Y/N.
Overall, great work.
I hope this helps.
It would be of great favour if you would read my work and send me feedback about it.