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@Guilherme426 Hey! So, I read your newest chapters. Again, I want to compliment you on your dialogue and the your story building. Both are incredibly engaging and interesting! It's also clear that you incorporated my advice with some of the formatting things! Something that I wanted to bring up is the inner narrative of characters. And the way I want to do this is by exploring the difference between screenplay and novels. 
            
            When writing a screenplay, it's pretty barebones in terms of description: we get the character's lines of dialogue, actions, and major revelations. And this works because the real story telling is going to happen on screen and the audience is going to get the visual input. But in a novel, there is no visual input, only words on a page. So, you need to include more of an inner narrative to engage the reader. To illustrate this, I put a couple links below. 
            
            First is the screenplay for the Devil Wears Prada, a movie that I love: 
            https://johnaugust.com/Assets/DEVIL_WEARS_PRADA_Full_Script.pdf
            
            Next, the novel that the screenplay is based on: 
            https://www.scribd.com/document/185999730/The-Devil-Wears-Prada-Lauren-Weisberger-Extract
            
            The first scene of the movie: 
            https://youtu.be/bG_xdkGrwSA?si=0nCMj60YTwhAQSZm
            
            A commentary on the screenplay that I just really like: 
            https://youtu.be/-WgzNFEu61o?si=dEV43hEOCbCwmL9z
            
            My recommendation is to just read the first few pages of the screenplay and then read the first few pages of the novel. They start in different places in the story, but I think it will illustrate my point of how novels hold more inner narrative. Screenplays don't go into depth because the movie is going naturally going to. But novels need to. And the whole fun of reading fiction is figuring out who the characters are based on what we're shown, not told. 
            
            I'd also recommend this TedEd on descriptive writing: 
            https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RSoRzTtwgP4
            
            Again, feel free to ignore this advice as I'm still a novice! But hope this helps!

@bunny1012345 me too lol

@Mayfortheages I love Chaotic Mara lol

@0wajd_ Haha she might not slap him, but she will be broken and chaotic

@bunny1012345 Ofc! And I can neither confirm nor deny (without spoiling)...but maybe

Omgg okay that makes sense thanks - im loving the diversity though x is maras mum from New Orleans?

@Mayfortheages ˆˆˆForgot to mention that the description from 90 comes from Leo having a flashback

@Mayfortheages sounds good 

@Guilherme426 Ofc! If you have any other questions, feel free to hit me up!

Thank you a lot  this really helps 

@Mayfortheages I really am dying to find out more lol, I have so many theories( apart from all the ones I’ve already talked about in the comments lol) but I’m too afraid of saying them in (a the very small) case that I may spoil myself..  I just really really really really REALLY hope they aren’t evil :-()
              (crossing my fingers and knocking on wood) 

@bunny1012345 ...

@bunny1012345 Thanks so much!! I love the mafia brothers trope myself and have been loving writing this story!!! Thanks so much for all of your support over the years!!! I'm so lucky to have readers like you <3
            
            Positive vibes right back at you ;)

@selenagreyy Let me think about it ;)