JuliaWhelan

I really admire how you’re blending guided meditation with storytelling. That crossover between sound, mantra, and fiction feels intentional and immersive. As a fellow creative, what usually comes first for you—the mantra or the story?

MelodysAmbience

Your mention of seeing colour made me think, and that is an awesome line by the way . The boy and girl are characters within a story, much like you and I are characters in life. We don't dictate the plot, but as characters, we define the colour.
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JuliaWhelan

I’d absolutely stay with that quiet, observational space you’ve created — it’s doing a lot of emotional work already. I love the contrast between his anger and the soft, everyday beauty she notices. It feels like the mantra becoming visible through her.
            I might let the power come from restraint: keep her mostly silent, let the world do the talking. By the end, it could be less about whether they ever speak and more about the fact that he leaves the train changed — seeing color where there was only grey before.
            It’s a lovely premise. Sometimes noticing beauty doesn’t fix everything, but it opens a door — and that feels like the heart of this piece.
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JuliaWhelan

@JuliaWhelan That’s a beautiful mantra — and such a quiet, powerful moment to draw from. It’s amazing how easily beauty gets overlooked when we’re rushing, and how much it changes a day when we choose to notice it instead.
            I love how you turn those small observations into something that feeds your writing. Starting from that kind of awareness really does feel like it leads straight to the heart.
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