evil-dead

Hey there!
          I don't mean to come off as discourteous, but I would really appreciate to hear some feedback on a short story I've written so I know where I can improve and etcetera. If you don't mind checking out my short story, "Struck," please click on this: https://www.wattpad.com/story/61530573-struck-a-short-story 
          Thank you kindly <3 I really would appreciate it as a newbie shortstory writer<3