Michael Stephens

@Sean_Browning and thank you for sharing  a story. 

@richellerenae Thank you for your comments. I've had similar recommendations but don't always know which are the paragraphs people think are overdone. If you find specific places and don't mind commenting there, that would be incredibly helpful to me. I do keep a log of suggested changes from readers and update my work regularly. Thank you again for reading. Weekend is almost here!

@richellerenae I'm enjoying the story and finding your writing to be quite good. Some of your descriptions of things are quite good though some seem a bit over done. Your ability to describe how a reflection, light or something else companies is great but perhaps you should not overdue and keep it simpler. I already have your other stories lined up to read.