@academybrat I’m not a writer, but I’m one heck of a reader. Most of my kids think I’m nuts for reading ff (at least one son has read some so he doesn’t judge). After reading a lot of stories, when I go back to a regular book I find myself wanting to comment. My only suggestion is to try and proof it before publishing. I can imagine that it is such a huge deal to get a chapter written and you just want to hit send or whatever. However, missing words, typos, punctuation and grammar all affect the overall reading experience. Yours is not at the top of what I’ve read (technically), but by no means near the bottom end either. There have been several I’ve had to quit reading because they were so poorly written it was hard to follow! Also, I may notice more mistakes than others because I am a proofreader by profession, so I try not to judge. Anyhow just something to think about...You have amazing ideas and they come through well. Just keep up the good work! And please don’t be offended. I offended someone once cause I said I didn’t like that Owen (in her story he was a complete dick, which she acknowledged). I guess she took it as an insult to her writing. I figure if you can make someone like or dislike a character you are doing your job as an author!
Have a great day!
