Milestro

For readers who enjoyed my web novel drafts, you might also like The Liberator Of Hell by mbell41803. A fan fiction with mixes of Helluva Boss, Hazbin Hotel, and Zoophobia, about a human hero who goes on a quest to fight evil and to bring peace. Check it out if you love Helluva Boss, Hazbin Hotel, and Zoophobia. Click the link below to read it.
          	
          	  https://www.wattpad.com/story/279137469-the-liberator-of-hell-when-worlds-collide-helluva

RedAlphaWolf1

@Milestro I only suggest this because I am an avid reader of My Cerberus Girlfriend and hope you will enjoy my stories as much as I enjoy yours.
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RedAlphaWolf1

can you read my stories? the first is: sword of darkness.
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/321545333-sword-of-darkness
          
          the second in the darkness series is: the darkness within.
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/337117379-the-darkess-within
          
          the final is yet to be produced.

Milestro

@RedAlphaWolf1 Here is my thought. Most people want stories written in prose because prose are immensive. When you read prose, you are able to visualize the story in your own mind, without being limited by the specific shots and angles that would be used in a film or television adaptation. This can lead to a more personal and engaging reading experience. It is also flexable and allows more character development. I couldn't visualize what is happening in your story, especially in large paragraphs. I suggest you shorten the paragraphs and don't use shot and location headings. Use specific details and show, don't tell. Hopefully my suggestion will help.
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RedAlphaWolf1

Everyone and their friend is saying that (The story is fine, but I didn't like the script format. It probably be better written in a novel style narrative.) but NO-ONE is taking time to explain what they are meaning. Can you explain what you and my entire reading community means?
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RedAlphaWolf1

question: what did you think of the story over all? please elaborate.
            Note: I tried to work on darkness within and had NO luck and I deleted it in favor of another idea I had for another sequel.
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319986d

I have a question because I’m really confused. You gave it an epilogue But when I checked it’s title when I tapped it on my phone it said ongoing instead of complete. I want to know is it really done or is their still more? And if it’s really done the. Can you make it say complete so that I won’t get confused?

Milestro

There will be one more story arc, and then it will be done.
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