OfficiallyInsane16

Umm...I just read the first chapter. You know it's a bit confusing when you use 'she' instead of 'I'. It's just a friendly suggestion to use 'I', I'm nobody to judge your book, it's yours and like you said your native language is Spanish, so it's understandable. 
          And if you don't mind, just pls check my profile and if it's worth you while pls read my books.
          Love, reader❤