@Mirka_Does_Stories
Hi guys I've been gone for over 2 years and I reread the Submission to the Mafia and was if just going to say I'm going to be rewriting and reediting it once more because I'm not happy with it anymore. Hope that's alright with everyone.
Yea i liked it i just didn’t like how he gave in near the end you know should’ve kept fighting but it was still good
Hiya, Love.
Thank you for voting on my book. I hope you do enjoy the reads.
Lots of Love.
Alpha.
Hey!!.. just wanted to say that I absolutely loved your book.. I was crying like crazy. Also it would be great if you could maybe give a different ending also.. I mean James being stuck with them will make this story more cruel.. or Sebastien's pov. And I would love to read more books from you.. thankyou for your work :)))
@slowdown_daddy you know what would've been crazy, it the whole escape was all James' imagination and in reality he isn't dead and wakes up thinking he died but shakes awake and he's back in his car, going to his father's house. Wouldn't that be crazy?
@slowdown_daddy I'm glad you enjoyed this book, I might make a spin off on the ending, but just maybe.
ALRIGHTY, PEOPLE I HAVE FINISHED EDITING AND CHANGING UP THE SUBMISSION TO THE MAFIA STORY, AS OF RIGHT NOW IT HAS A DIFFERENT STORYLINE, DIFFERENT PLOT LINE, CHARACTERS ACT DIFFERENT, IT IS WAY MORE BRUTAL AND GORY AND CONTAINS MUCH MORE 18+ SHIT SO BEWARE WHEN READING. THE ENDING OF THE STORY HAS BEEN CHANGED TO. HAVE FUN READING AGAIN! I HOPE YOU WON'T BE TOO MAD AT ME. LOVE YOU ALL, SAFE READING <3
About the story before I edited and rewritten it:
1. I have made the story confusing.
2. Many things didn't make sense and line up so yeah.
3. I was out of ideas in the last 4-5 chapters so they were bad.
I have rewritten the story so it's different, many things will make more sense and it is way more 18+ abusive and gory so yeah, I was really out of ideas and stressed from College when I was finishing the original, non-edited version of this story which is now changed so yeah. If you wanna re-read it again, go ahead. Thanks for reading.
P.S. The ending is a bad one...
I have rewritten 6/20 chapters of this fic already and will slowly read through them and fix them up. I have changed some characters and how they act. For instance, James isn't such a baby anymore, yes he cries but who wouldn't if someone is beating the shit out of you or hurting you. Also Ms. Clara is not a sweet woman, she is working for Sebastian and the man has respect for her. She is a woman who is cold and stoic but sweet to those who are family. Some events in chapters have been changed drastically from some to a lot. Chapter 5 was changed the most I believe to be way more brutal than before. Anyways I hope you enjoy the story way more when all of the chapters are fixed up and re-written, some things I will definitely change is; the past friends, yeah no, they aren't friends during childhood, also the part where James gets admitted to the hospital and his father comes, yeah no, I will also change it from James liking the men ever, cause he wont, Marcos will be more rough as well and not so sweet to James cause I actually hated it. James does get a concussion when Sebastian smashed his head against the wall but doesn't lose his memory, the men will be way more brutal and abusive to James. The only reason that James accepts the men is because of the abuse he goes through, bit by bit as the weeks turn to months James starts acting more submissively to not get hurt by the men, fighting from time to time. In the end James will escape the guys but in the end he will be caught again, the guy selling him off. So the ending will be a bad end not a good end. I wanted to make it a happy ending but thought about it. With so much abuse that James went through, will it be mental, physical or even sexual he is broke and getting captured again after thinking he was safe, sold out by someone he thought he could trust just breaks him...
So I'm going to be editing some Chapters in Submission to the Mafia (BL) since I've been reading through it and I've noticed mistakes and errors which I made in each chapter. There might be some changes to a few chapters that differ from the original Chapters, so if you remember them differently I'm sorry. I hope you enjoy the story if you're reading it as a new reader. Lot's of love, author. <3
P.S: Some characters might be changed a bit, for example Ms. Clara isn't going to be a gentle, naïve woman who is sympathetic towards James but more stoic and cold. She is also Elijah's mother. Sebastian is way more psychotic and rude and the others are less nicer to James. I will also be changing the fact that they were "friends" when younger since I forgot to even point they were since I forgot about it so I will be changing that. There will be way more violence and abuse towards James and degrading and use of slurs. There will also be way more scenes which will be 18+ and triggering such as; r@pe, sexual assault, gangr@pe, manipulation/gaslighting, ptsd, suicdal thoughts/suicide attempt and some talk of anorexia/eating disorder (not feeding someone enough/force feeding for fun so beware)
We just reached over 101K reads on Submission to the Mafia and I can't stress enough how much this all means to me. I'm glad so many people enjoyed my story. Thanks for all.the support it really means a lot to me.
Hi, I just posted the first Chapter to a story I am making called '400 Years In The Past'. You can go and check it out if you want. Happy reading.
Kind Regards, your Writer.
Hiya.
Thank you for voting on my book. I hope you do enjoy the reads.
Lots of Love.
Alpha.
Hi everyone, I just posted a new story called Someone who cares. I have already made 3 Chapters so you have some reading to do. I really hope that you enjoy this story as much as you enjoyed Submission to the Mafia. I love the story line so far and hope that you'll like it too.
"This story follows our main character Liam Jay Williams who gets sentenced to prison on 3 first-degree-murder accounts with no parole. Let's see what he's like and what he'll do. How will he develop over the storyline and who will help him strip down his walls that he built up over the years."
This story isn't going to have a ship or anything as of right now and will be strictly Platonical.
@Mikio_27 I have drafted that Story. I started to lose motivation with it. I might return to it later but as of right now I wont return to it, sorry.
@Mirka_Does_Stories Where is it posted because it isn't in the published section so we can't read it. Thank you.