Rubyfanguy12
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Lawrence_Redgrave
Yo!
May I ask how you're liking the story so far? Thanks for the votes, by the way.
Lawrence_Redgrave
@ Lawrence_Sparda You worded your critiques without sounding offensive... You're an angel!!!
But seriously now, thanks for the feedback, I wish there were more people like you in the world.
So yeah, the start of the story was really weak, I had no experience and, honestly? I had no clue what I was doing... Just a pre-established concept and a big imagination, but overall, I was just a newbie.
As it progressed, I was able to piecing it together, and have way more things planned now, instead of just improvising everything.
As I wrote, and searched things related to writing (adjectives, strong verbs, sentence openings, structures, etc.) during the two months the story came to a hiatus, I like to think my writing improved.
About the MC becoming a devil: it may not seem like it, but I spent a lot of time debating whether or not should I turn the mf into one. Then, in an eureka moment, the idea of turning the evil piece into an item struck me.
Between being human and devil, he could choose what he would be anytime he wants.
And about Asia...... I admit I was just lacking ideas in that part, and wanted to give continuity to the story...
Thanks again for the feedback, it'll help me improve a lot in future stories.
The789Guy
what's your pfp now?
Miso-Tofu
@The789Guy it's an original art made by an artist on Pixiv. I'll leave a link to the artist's profile just in case: ミスリルヘルム https://www.pixiv.net/users/4576609
Lunar_Lunatics
Thx for adding my story~☆
Please check out my others~☆
Miso-Tofu
@Lunar_Lunatics you're welcome :), and I'll be sure to check out your other stories too whenever I can
The789Guy
Who's the girl on your pfp?
The789Guy
thanks for the follow!
Miso-Tofu
@The789Guy you're welcome . I'm loving your stories by the way (the ones I've read so far); they are interesting and are pretty much rare (that's how I see it). Keep up the good work too!