Missbrekker24

I updated Chapter two, it’s longer <3 Slowly fixing the pacing !

black__belladonna000

hi pookie!
          So, I read the first 4 chapters of your book, and I liked it quite a lot. However, you could focus on:
          Internal reactions
          Make the pacing a bit slower 
          
          Also, where do you get your pictures, banners, and covers? I suggest using a uniform banner that captures the aesthetic of the book for all chapters
          
          ALSO, I LOVE IT! MOON'S PERSONALITY IS SOOOO GOOD!!

Missbrekker24

Aaa thank you so much !! I’m really happy you gave it your time. I love Moon too !
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Missbrekker24

Your feedback was SO helpful!!! I was focused on figuring out the dialogue and Dynamic that I sometimes get lazy with the reactions. That was such good advice!. I rewrote a few sentences in chapter one and two to fix, and will continue with the rest. 
            About the pacing, what do you feel could slow down? Their overall relationship? 
            For the banners, I am not proud of this (I do not condone it) but I wanted to give the reader a feel of exactly how I imagine it. So It is ai generated. My hope is to eventually get a friend to draw. But what do you reckon? Something from my Pinterest board could be enough?
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