AmberlyHuntress

Hey hey!
          Ahhh I just discovered your Rafe story and I'm in love with it!
          I adore your writing style and the personalities of your characters! Can't wait to read more!! 
          
          (Ohmigosh my inordinate exclamation mark usage makes me look insane; oops haha)
          
          xx

MoonlitLagoon1

@AmberlyHuntress 
            Awww oh my gosh you're so sweet thank you so much!!! <3 I actually rarely ever use wattpad now haha so I apologize if you're a frequent user of this site. I'll try to continue to upload more to here but I forget so often it's kind of just become a huge afterthought. Thanks again for your kind words - it really made my day! Have a Happy Halloween and be safe out there!!
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SHEIFREDRICK

Hi! I'm the one from the club who's asking about the dream sequence prologue! :D
          
          So, as of now, I only got the prologue out, hence why I was asking people about it before publishing chapter one :) but if it's alright with you, can you give me a critique about the prologue, and what can be done to it? Thank you very very much! :)

MoonlitLagoon1

@SHEIFREDRICK Honestly, it's your story so you call the shots. I don't know where your story will lead so I can't say wether or not you should change it. I just know dreams aren't a good way to start, but like I said, if you're not aiming to  publish it I wouldn't worry! Besides, this is a first draft of a story, right? You have LOADS of time to decide what works and what doesn't throughout :D And as you post more, more readers can lend their insight as to what's working. I like what you have planned for the first chapter, just be careful not to infodump and you'll be good :D
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SHEIFREDRICK

@MoonlitLagoon1 do you think I really should change it, based on the things I just told you? I mean whether it's cliche or whether the execution is poor?
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SHEIFREDRICK

@MoonlitLagoon1 thank you! Ah, also, about the consequences, on the very next chapter, her professor that taught the class she fell asleep in requested her to see him, to discuss about this dream problem she's having. This omen dream works in a way that, if you got to the end of the dream, the conclusion of it, it'll become a reality. I'm putting the stakes for Aquila in this aspect. Her professor also taught her how to stop the dream and that's where her journey begins.
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