MorganBieberStyles

@xXNoorHoqueXx Thank you so much:) I am gonna continue writing because I honestly do enjoy it. Really though I don't care about the votes. Thanks for following me:)

MorganBieberStyles

@sybil_beth hey:) thanks for reading my story. I don't ever edit anything because I'm lazy and never read anything I write. I've written 2 other books since this and am working on my 3rd, and I think my grammar has improved. I write in 3rd person because its easier for me, and it's just easier to start off each chapter the way I do. Thank you for the tips though:) My instagram is @123ilovejustinb

sybil_beth

Ok. So I just read your book Kaylee, and I have some tips. ;) #1 always read over what you've written before you post it and fix it up. #2 Instead of going... 'Kaylee pulled the cereal out of the cupboard, then Kaylee watched as Kaylee's brothers wrestled in front of Kaylee, Kaylee thought they were annoying.'      You should write....'Kaylee pulled the cereal out of the cupboard, then she watched as her brothers wrestled in front of her, she thought they were annoying'..... See what I mean it just flows a lot better.  #3 Up the top of each part you've written 'Collin's pov' but then you write... 'Collin Graham, Da Da Da...' Don't do that. If you tell us up the top who's pov it is then we know, you don't have to tell us again. #4 I don't really think that pov's work very well written in third person. If you going to use pov's then it's better to use first person.
          All over though it was a good book. ;) I'm not trying to sound like a hater I just wanna help you further unlock your potential. =) what's your instagram name mine's sybil_beth follow me and I'll follow you back. =)