This is terrible writing, both of the above pieces are drivel in my opinion, the zombie and horror Genres are over-saturated as is because of rubbish such as the aforementioned stories. work like this is spewed out by no-talent hacks who believe they have some sort of profound experience or skill with regards to writing. These are pieces that real authors or anybody with talent could produce in a single instance of writing. Too much influence on sex, the story sounds like it was written by a teenager coping with puberty and trying to be rid of their virginity. The author of this 'story' should probably put down their pen and go find a brothel to rid themselves of their obvious sexual frustration, maybe then the writing will improve. The writer also seems to put a huge amount of focus onto negatives, descriptions of characters suggests this writer speaks from experience, placing blame on people who have seemingly done nothing wrong. If I had one tip for this author it would be to do one of two things, to put their PC and any writing utensils into a box and bury it, ever to see the light of day again. Or to do the same, with the author substituting the PC and Pens. A disappointing read in all senses, the writer should consider a day job as I can't see a publisher picking up on this. Less sex, less teenage angst and more talent please, maybe then the work will be tolerable.
