MysticallMe

"Candy Hearts," is advancing way too fast. I like where you're coming from, but Alane falls for the boy in like 3 days. The first date she said the date was bad, the second date she kisses him, and the third date she's having sex with the guy. I think that it should be more structured, instead of being so fast-paced. I like where it's going though. So, keep going; I want to know what happens next.