N7Edmund

HEY THIS IS N7edmund I moved accounts, come follow me and read my new book

I am going to begin writing Timeline Segment 21 and will post it tonight and if anyone wants to comment on how i represent james vega kik me @n7edmund or just comment I NEED FEEDBACK 

I need help constructing Vega's dialogue patterns. I know he says some random things. Help if you know anything. For example Lola/Loco of course only for Shepard

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Any Comments on my story? Suggestions for the story? For the writing style? For a character?