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Ralsei_the_Darkner
I should probably make a book cover so it can be visible.
Ralsei_the_Darkner
I'm on wattpad pc android emulator and so when I try to read a page it tilts 90 degrees
Ralsei_the_Darkner
Thanks I might post chapter 3 next week also so stay tuned,
And I will keep reading yours too.
Ralsei_the_Darkner
A. Nira felt the breeze in the air, a strange feeling of calmness took over fear.
B. Nira felt the breeze in the air, flowing with the scent like a calm river in the soul
Ralsei_the_Darkner
About the character name highlights, I've seen this in certain styles and they're also good
I wanted to ask you about certain choices of sentences in chapter 2 in which I put A and B somewhere
To give choices for you to choose which would be better
Ralsei_the_Darkner
I'm still reading on your chapters, but I just posted an early release on-
my chapter 2. And I want your opinions on it
This is where the emotion is, just wait a bit 'till the end of chapter 2.
Ralsei_the_Darkner
@NMS2010 Are you talking about your read counts? For a moment I thought it was about my chapter 2 XD.
NMS2010
@Ralsei_the_Darkner bro in both of ur chapters there is one thing which u should change and that is highlighting the characters names all the time
Ralsei_the_Darkner
Okay so to make it clear, you should check chapter 1 of "Stranded upside down". perhaps the problem may be that it has no book cover?
NMS2010
bro i call it a peak all u need no do is add a bit more emotions and increase
intense but right now it is solid 8.5
@Ralsei_the_Darkner
Ralsei_the_Darkner
I have two stories written but I want you to read "Stranded upside down" the more recent one.
Ralsei_the_Darkner
Expect it to be as long as chapter 1 so plss bear with me,
And it's still sort of unofficial I'll post the early release tommorow.
NMS2010
@Ralsei_the_Darkner no problem at all but one doubt u are telling me that u have not posted ep 1 but u are going to post ep 2 first ? but why like that?
Ralsei_the_Darkner
I'll name it chapter 2(early releaseee)
so you could judge it first before I invite anybody else.
NMS2010
@Ralsei_the_Darkner bro i call it a peak all u need no do is add a bit more emotions and increase intense but right now it is solid 8.5
Ralsei_the_Darkner
@NMS2010 It's really great and quite unique, the flashback at the first chapter was a really nice touch and as far as I can see, from weak to powerful but his true enemy is himself can a weak person like him take control over this brutal power? It's a bit similar to my chapter 2 also but I want to know your thoughts first.