Hey my friend. I enjoyed the next chapter of your book, but there is one thing I'd like to point out. When you place commas, you don't space the next word in the series. I was wondering if that's the way you learned comma placement or if there's a method to your madness. At any rate, it would make the transition from thought to thought easier to read if you space your words after the commas. Other than that, you're doing excellent. Keep it up. :)