Nery_P_official

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KazBrekker_V4

Hello, Monsieur author! I've come with some feedback! 
          
          So, your fanfic is actually pretty alright. I absolutely adore the fact the you were even able to make art of the oc and some other scenes! Though, there are some areas it's lacking, and that's what I'm here for! So, here we go! 
          
          1. There's a little bit of inconsistency in personality and sometimes feelings of characters. It's not really a large issue, but sometimes a character do a 90 to 180 degrees mood switch, or some event will happen that doesn't really effect your OC or another character immediately, but they suddenly have strong feelings towards it later. 
          
          2. The chapters are really short. I don't have a massive problem with short chapters, but, this largely effects fight scenes as they kinda wrap up a little too quick for my liking. Speaking of fights-
          
          3. Uh... It kinda feels like your OC is a tad bit replacing Gojo. What I mean by that is, we're taking over the roll of strongest. Now, not only is that kinda a big deal, since being the strongest is kinda Gojo's whole thing and character conflict. Not only that, but, kinda feels like he's just built different from birth and kurb stomp almost everyone who gets in hus way. Now, this isn't the case all the time, of course. Injaar (I think that was his name?) Being a good example of that. But, I still think I should comment on it. 
          
          Now, I'm in no means hating. You're doing pretty well for your first long term fan fic! I'm sure you can do better with practice. I believe that everyone can write a good story if they just try. Welp, that's all from me, folks. Ciao!

Nery_P_official

@ KazBrekker_V4  
            Yo! Long time no see! My apologies for disappearing—this year has been really hectic for me!
            
            I genuinely appreciate your feedback, and yes, this is my first long-term fanfic! I also admit that some things, like Vinzce’s emotional side, weren’t very well developed when it comes to loss. It was only later that I realized his grieving felt very… “dry,” so I had to try to concentrate it in some way, even if it was a bit late. That’s something I’ll try not to mess up in future works.
            
            Regarding his role in the story, I tried to give him his own narrative core, as if “he existed in the original work, but in the background, and this story was us seeing that background.” However, due to future plans, I changed this idea to some extent. Even so, the concept of him having his own core still applies, though more subtly going forward. That said, in some situations he does end up being the “Gojo of situation X or Y,” as a consequence of how his power works. Still, I appreciate you pointing out areas that can be improved!
            
            As for the chapter length, that’s also something I’m not very satisfied with. Unfortunately, at the time I was writing the chapters while doing other things simultaneously, like going to the gym, for example. Also, I don’t write directly on Wattpad—I write everything in Samsung Notes, then send it to my best friend to translate, review, and format before I post it. Because of this process, and to make sure I could post in time and that my friend could translate it before going to sleep, I ended up making chapters shorter than ideal.
            
            Either way, I appreciate it, and regarding the original art, I unfortunately made some pieces without proper finishing—like the one from the Jogo vs. Vinzce chapter—due to the rush to post.
            
            That said, God bless you!
            Happy new year!
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