Nicholas Stillman

Hi Nicholas, how are you? You had critiqued my story almost 2 years ago and your suggestions had helped me a lot. I am re-writing my story with some major changes. If you have time, can you please do a critique for this one as well? I've only written a few chapters yet...i'll be really grateful :)
          
          here's the link http://www.wattpad.com/story/9400295-the-smile-the-eternal-sunshine. thank you so much for your time. Cheers!

I read the first chapter and i do have to say, I didn't catch any major mistakes but if there's something I missed, please do let me know!

Thanks for the criticism! Helped a lot! fanned! Thanks!
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Heyy. I have read your previous feedbacks, and can I have my feedback? If yes, cool, here's my story :http://www.wattpad.com/story/1255835-death-of-june . If not, that's cool to. :)