Hi there, just gave "Naïve" a read! It seems like you're very passionate about your writing, and I think a good beginning description, a little more info about the characters and their relationships, and fixing up the grammar in your story would go a long way! I am by no means an expert, but as a reader I'm more likely to stick with a story that's written clearly and gives me a reason to feel connected to the characters. I'll keep an eye out for your next update =)