Hamarkid54
I like the revised 1st and 2nd and second chapters, although I think I prefer the originals a little better, they add a little more drama to the story line and give some more options for the way the story could evolve. All in all a very good story so far that I really enjoy as far as I have read and hope it continues since I think an author needs to remember that the first person they are writing for is themself.
