Thepotatobag

I loved your work but I wanna give you some advice though.
          
          1. Put a space after landing the full stop. 
          2. Your words are great but use synonyms and be a little descriptive.
          3. Use proper punctuation and correct grammar.
          
          In eg:
          
          The rich young adult, Ari, who turned 18 just, has a very sharp brain. The girl keeps the quality of being mature and understanding. She's savage as the jungles, with wholesome positive attitude. The black haired is an ambivert, someone who exhibits qualities of both introversion and extroversion. Her mood, context and goal are the things which her mood depends on.
          
          I hope your can give some support to my book too. And, improve yourself too!

Thepotatobag

@Thepotatobag haha that's My responsibility as an author :)<3
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Nikkjk

@Thepotatobag thank you so much for this! willingly accepted<3
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