@Nixieaquawrites
Hi,
I really like your story so far, but I do have some advice. I haven't read all of it yet, but I noticed that your tenses keep switching between present and past, like where it says , "Nixie giggled and Vian sighs." You should really just choose one of them and stick to it.
That's not the only thing I've noticed, but I don't exactly feel confident sharing it all. (I'm very new to Wattpad.) If you'd like to hear more, please let me know. You can also let me know if you'd rather not.