@Taylorrae_4315xx
Honestly, I completely love you "being yourself". So far, the story has a lot of voice, making a ton of fun to read.
If I may, I do have one critique: The sentences seem a choppy. I sometimes find myself getting a little lost, but when I find my way back and figure out what's going on, it's very witty and enjoyable.
That's it, I love what you're doing with your story and have high hopes for it. Just maybe get it to flow a little bit more and it'll go from great to fantastic :)
You seem like an amazing person and writer, I'm psyched for when the next chapter come out :D
Good luck!
-Kay