Novelerio
ILLYASVIEL has been continued !
Novelerio
Novelerio
Gonna continue da storeh .
sandwicheshaverights
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Hi! Sorry for the late reply, I've been busy. Anyway, I like that the story has gotten to the part where the character(s) must train. Since the phrase "Nani the fuck?!" is used quite a few times in the latest chapter, I suggest replacing it with something else after a while.
sandwicheshaverights
Also, about Lucilia: I know she's supposed to be/come off as tsundere. However, usually when she acts rude toward Aiko it is unnecessary and a little bit irritating. Could you make her nicer and/or have Aiko stand up for himself more? ☺
sandwicheshaverights
Hi. I finished reading what you have so far for your story. I like that it's fast-paced and jumps around a lot. I suggest that you slow the action down more often to give the reader a chance to go over what just occured. Slowing down the action can also create suspense. ☺
Novelerio
Salamat Senpai.
Dark_Amaterasu
haha ganda ng storya mo ahh
kaleangelaperez
nice :)
EddieBabe29
Galing! (y)