theratsatan
Amazing story remaster so far
Obsidian-Ace
Obsidian-Ace
Well where to start…
Almost one whole year since I’ve updated HR and the grand total reads as of today has just now crossed 13k… to be honest I’m still pretty shocked about how many people were invested into the story I had to tell at the time which now averaged about a good constant 300 which I’m very happy about.
But that’s not the reason for this post, one year ago I felt the problem with the old project was the idea everything felt rushed and character actions felt pushed without reason and without logic. Nothing carried any real weight and it felt like anyone could take what I had and do better.
And I stand by my decision to cut the project short and reset the scene to give you a better experience of what I initially imagined which brings me to what I have scheduled tomorrow.
At exactly 6:00 PM MST a new story will become available ready to take center stage and hopefully it will present a more polished story of which I believe you deserve.
UrizRead
Hey since you're making new characters and the old story is discontinued I've been meaning to ask: were you going to reveal Maverick (the dragon if I remember correctly) being sick, scarred or something along those lines?
You left that thought in the air when they escape from the clothing store and he is left bruised from being dragged too hard by the wrist, which was weird for what is the most similar thing to a natural scaly tank in the anthro universe.
UrizRead
@Obsidian-Ace That's cool, dragon guy taking the heavy role too serious and paying the price lol. I'm guessing it would have showed more and more as the story progressed but oh well RIP this team/story. (Though it would have been kinda funny if he got in a fight with one of the humans and ended on the ground just after receiving a couple of punches.)
Obsidian-Ace
Glad someone caught that.
To explain the situation with Maverick you’d have to catch a few other small details exactly like the store situation.
The other most prominent example I left was after they escaped from custody and out of the small group the only one injured slightly was Maverick with the bullet graze.
While the other example would be his internal bleeding after being shot while he was part of a different unit.
The reasoning for his easy bruising and weak body is how much he had to physically “tank” during his time as a soldier in his prior role.
The idea I wanted to create for him was how his body was giving out on him from how much he destroyed his body trying to protect his prior team without seeking medical treatment after they died.
Similar to some situations when certain organs in the human body suffer damage they do not or cannot repair themselves.
I’m not the best at explaining it but the idea I wanted to share was his own body’s durability and healing were heavily inhibited by the amount of physical trauma it already experienced.
ghosttoast09
DON’T
Obsidian-Ace
Update
Good news chaps the spring semester is over bad news the summer semester has started and writing will once again be hindered for some time BUT it will not be completely stopped seeing as I only have two classes but here are some things I believe will be important to know as to why this is taking so long…
1
I’ve completely scrapped the entire cast of the previous work and created whole new set of characters and personalities. Of course there might be some similarities to what was but for the most part these should all be completely new and separate.
2
I’m spending much more time in the world building aspect as well as writing out how I want to present this story to be as entertaining as possible to avoid what I did prior which to me felt like all I was doing was pushing plot with no real reasoning
Wrap up.
I’m still alive
I’m still working
I do plan to update this summer if not by this fall
Side note:
My secondary project has been halted due to a lack of attention seeing as I’ve put all my attention on to the story that brought you all here in the first place
Sorry this is taking so long and I apologize for leaving you all hanging around for what seems like more than a year now and I’m honestly angry with myself for doing that.
UrizRead
@Obsidian-Ace Good to know you continue to make your new story's world more complex and real, and don't rush take your time to make it great =)
Obsidian-Ace
Hey… I’m not dead… so I just finished spring semester and good news gents and ladies.
I’ve managed to put tons of time towards writing again and managed to meet a great editor who’s pushed me in a direction I believe you all will enjoy tenfold.
Sorry for the wait, I have no excuse for my absence and I know my words probably mean nothing at this point but I can assure you I am back to work and should be releasing two projects simultaneously
ghosttoast09
Jarvis, activate freaky mode
ghosttoast09
:3
Obsidian-Ace
Sorry for the increasingly long delays guys college finals are coming up… again…
I haven’t had the opportunity to sit down clear my mind and get the writing mindset up and running in order to get the rewrite up and running as well
However good news on the rise is the fact I have something worth publishing for you all to read…
but I want to offer you guys a decision on that matter.
Would you rather I make the chapter longer and get more into the start of the new project or would you rather I drop what I have and consider it to be a teaser of what’s to come?
Obsidian-Ace
With that being said I’m very happy that you all are waiting so patiently but at the same time I don’t want to keep you all waiting too long
Obsidian-Ace
@UrizRead thx m8 for your input and of course for the advice, I have received other responses from others in DMs that say that they’d like a longer chapter so I plan to do that. And yeah I do, do this for free and I’m aware that I have other priorities in life but I also want to tell a good story and enjoy the experience
UrizRead
I would personally go for a teaser to see if the general idea sounds good.
That said please take time to remind yourself that if you write it has to be because you enjoy it; because you have an idea in your head and receive joy from the process of bringing it to life. Reflect in if it feels like something you enjoy or a chore.
If it is indeed something you like to do, just do so.
No apologies. You are bringing adventures to life for free and owe nothing to no one; writing is for you to enjoy.
No delivery dates for new chapters or expectations for your story to be a masterpiece; no nothing that may take away the enjoyment.
Write whatever you want however you want, learn in the process, make mistakes, write again, learn more, make more mistakes...
And yes ask for input if you're stuck but outside of that just experiment and be your own boss; mistakes don't exist, just happy accidents.
Obsidian-Ace
aight, so I've got news and a final decision... no way of sugar coating it but i am finally going to start my rewrite or edit of Hybrid's Retribution. However, two things one I'll leave it up so you guys can revisit it any time for whatever reason you like and two I'm going to finally post my second project in the meantime during the rewrite.
im a bit excited to finally start something different that i have a better threshold on and with much more writing experience than i did before so stay tuned i plan to update soon
UrizRead
@Obsidian-Ace Terrific, thanks for the reply! That's very good to hear and I think it's the right decission. While the story was good it did feel like everything was happening a tad too fast, at least from Hector's and Carter's groups perspectives. So cheers for going after more world building and either more or longer chapters, I think it will be well worth it ;3
Obsidian-Ace
@UrizRead sorry it took so long to respond to ya but to answer this question I want to focus a lot more on world building instead of just pushing out character actions and story progression. As of looking back on the original story not much is known about any of the characters aside from family relations and the roles characters play And the overall story I originally had in mind has taken a turn into a rather simple and rushed tale instead of a more complex one
Walkinbo
@Obsidian-Ace I can’t wait to see what you change about the book in the rewrite, but I’m also excited to see what your new project will be