Could you please critique my story, Dear Nick?
http://www.wattpad.com/story/6268167-dear-nick
It's a teen fiction about a girl named Jolin, who lives in Taiwan and is going through a rough time at school because she feels obliged to study but she doesn't know what for. So she writes to Nick Jonas, just for someone to confide in. She has a couple of friends, ex Jesse, Vicky, Stacie... but she isn't really close to any of them.
I'd really appreciate any comments you can give me. And if you require any payment, please let me know. Thanks!